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NCISLA FanFic: An Alternate View for The Long Goodbye

NCISLA TheLongGoodbyeAn Alternate View by Sweet Lu

A different ending for The Long Goodbye

The banter in the armory was light, but with an undertone that none of them acknowledged, especially Callen. Deeks thought he looked tired, and trying to hide his concern for his partner that he was pretty sure boiled just under the surface. There was sadness too, for all of the team, knowing what awaited Jada when she returned home, so his wiseassing became louder and to Callen probably more annoying, but it was what he always did to ease a tough situation, although he didn’t think the man appreciated it at the moment, unsure if he ever did.

He thought they had worked well together today, their relationship becoming a bit closer each time they were paired. Today the conversation had turned toward the consequences of their actions while undercover and it had hit both of them with suppressed memories neither wanted to dwell on. No humor had come to mind to ease the guilt. Now they both became distracted by the two beautiful women in front of them who had apparently bonded somewhere along the line, surprising the hell out of him.

They both turned to stared at each other as the two women commiserated about PSBs and their desire to discuss it over drinks… just the two of them. What was that all about? Then Talia made a move on Callen, freezing his brain, and causing just a hint of jealousy to flare briefly. The man seemed to actually consider it, and he wondered if he’d misread his concern about the day’s events, but then remembered how good Callen was at covering up what was really going on inside his head.

“You gonna take her up on it?” he asked after they left. “Or would you rather grab a couple of beers and hang out with me?”

“Those are my two choices?”

“We could catch the Clippers’ game at Murphy’s,” Deeks said lightly, wanting the company more than he expected.

Callen looked away, his eyes distant and his demeanor tentative, as if he wanted to say something, to reveal a part of himself he usually kept hidden.

“Or you could just smolder in private,” Deeks said with a soft laugh.

“Yeah, there’s that,” Callen smirked.

“Or go hang out with Sam,” letting the suggestion float in the air between them.

“Deeks…,” his tone thick with warning.

“You talk to him yet?” he asked boldly, ignoring the man’s piercing blue eyes.

“About what? Think we should share our feelings about the outcome of this case?” He threw the words out almost as a challenge, until retreating into a confession. “Neither one of us is very good at that.”

“So, just share a beer, G,” he replied.

“You telling me what to do with my free time now?” Callen shot back.

“We both know what it’s like,” Deeks said quietly. “Just hanging out doing normal things, can get your head back where it needs to be.”

The man let out a long sigh and stared toward the door, the tension apparent in his body language finally easing.

“You want to join us?” Callen breathed out apologetically, surprising him.

“What? Me? Hang out with a couple of old guys?” Deeks scoffed, getting a laugh out of the senior agent. “Naw… I’m just gonna go stare at the ocean and smolder by myself.”

“Don’t knock it till you tried it,” Callen said easily.

“I’ll let you know how it went in the morning,” Deeks replied with a cocky grin.

“You do that,” Callen said as he turned to go. “And Deeks?”


“Thanks, guy.”



Lindy D. (Sweet Lu) is a contributor and assistant editor for wikiDeeks.
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About Lindy D. (61 Articles)
I write Fan Fiction under the name Sweet Lu. I am a former graphic designer and live in Northern California with my husband and a Cocker Spaniel named Gracie. I love the character Marty Deeks, love writing about him and love watching ECO bring him to life.

10 Comments on NCISLA FanFic: An Alternate View for The Long Goodbye

  1. This is wonderful. I loved that Deeks and Callen had so much time together in this episode. It would have been nice if it ended more like this.


  2. hermionesmydawg // November 21, 2015 at 10:17 AM // Reply

    This definitely would have been a better ending. Callen is reserved but at least an acknowledgment of the pain his partner must have been going through would have been appropriate. Partner swaps are great and necessary but when all the banter and fun fades away, everyone on this show is extremely emotionally attached to their partner. Thanks for writing it!


  3. Super Nice Synopsis Sweet Lu! 💗


  4. Ju5t Becau5e // November 21, 2015 at 3:50 PM // Reply

    First, it’s fun to see the interaction between Deeks and Callen continued in this fanfiction. I liked how Deeks could read Callen’s expressions and how he knew that hanging out with Sam was really want Callen wanted/needed to do. Thanks for such a wonderful story.
    Secondly, (or Second, as Kensi would say,) I love that wikiDeeks has added fanfiction to their features! You guys rock!


  5. Thank you for the wonderful story. I like seeing the two of them partnered or just hanging out. I had not thought of it until reading this and the comments here just how much each of them needs their partner.


  6. Wonderful take on what could have happened. I love it💛😄


  7. You captured Deeks and Callen so well. I am always frustrated by Callen’s aloofness, which I think must play into Deeks’ feelings of inadequacy. I wish he’d make a little more of an effort to actually befriend the poor guy, ’cause I know if would mean a lot to him. Thanks for “fixing” the ending for us!


  8. I loved your story, as I always love all the fics that perfectly fix scenes that left me a little (or very) disappointed in the episodes, as this one. Thanks for your different ending.


  9. Thanks for all the kind comments. I couldn’t help myself. I do love to see Deeks and Callen paired up. I thought it interesting that Callen acknowledged they don’t hang out together, yet they seemed to work easily together. I felt they showed respect for each other in this episode, even though Callen remained the lone wolf at the end.


  10. Leave it to wikiDeeks to really “get it”! Love this better ending so much! Thank You. wikiDeeks really does ROCK!!!


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